The Red Sox Won!!!!!

Yes, indeed, the Red Sox finally broke a horrendous losing streak, and did it in fine style. The Brock Star (Brock Holt for those not in the know) hit for the cycle! Lots of guys hit who had not been doing so which was very good news. Wade Miey looked pretty darn good too, which is a wonderful sign.

All of this means that I am primed for writing more tomorrow because I’m in a good mood. I’m working on a book I started when Fantastical Trips was resting (like now). I seem to have found a new editor which is good because I may finish the current draft on this one by the end of the week, and it will be off to my beta reader ASAP. He’s a bit tough on me, so there will be rewriting to do when I get it back, but then off to the editor. Its working title is Wandering Ways, but that is open to changes as I get more feedback.

Here’s the current first paragraph:

I thought I would go wandering. My mother always said there had to be more to the world than our little village, and there was rumor of a city if I were to take the high road out. My father died years ago when he and others of the men tried to build a tower of stone, which they hoped to use as a lookout to be able to observe the country around us and warn of any dangers. When all were involved in raising the next course of stones, the tower tilted and crushed them all, twenty-three men between the ages of 22 and 59. Only five men remained alive in the village, four grandfers and Olly Bright, the biggest fool you’re likely to meet. Olly always had pretensions of running us, and when he was the only able-bodied man left, he certainly tried. But the old ladies put such a fright into him that he never did more than take his equipment to all the fields of all the ladies in town and plow them for free, or for an occasional home-cooked meal.

My editor thinks I need a stronger first line. What do you think? The person who comes up with something better that I use will get a copy of the ebook when it comes out. I know, this isn’t really fair, since you have no idea where the story is going, but I’ll give you a hint. She’s under a compulsion of which she is unaware. So please, give me some suggestions, and I’ll let you know in about a month if it’s been picked.

What do you think? Please comment!

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